BearMan
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well I wasnt able to make this a poll but your responses are appreciated.....
I am going to be putting a "POEM" in a BOTTLE that is sealed with a cork and have it so we find it on our normal sunday walk on the beach(having a friend baby sit it from a distance with camcorder in hand too).....
Which one of the following should i put in the bottle??
I am going to be putting a "POEM" in a BOTTLE that is sealed with a cork and have it so we find it on our normal sunday walk on the beach(having a friend baby sit it from a distance with camcorder in hand too).....
Which one of the following should i put in the bottle??
POEM #1
From the Sun to the Moon
and (should i just remove "and")
The Sand to the Stars
Like the sparkles of the stars
on
A clear summers night(or is "A moon lit night" better)
It is you that I will Love
For the rest of my life
SPOKEN: WILL YOU MARRY ME
POEM #2
From the Sun to the Moon
and The Sand to the Stars
From Mercury to Venus
and Earth to Mars
Like the sparkles of the stars
On a Moon lit night
It is you that I will Love
For the rest of my life
SPOKEN: WILL YOU MARRY ME
POEM #3
From the Sun to the Moon
The Sea to the Sky
Like the sparkles of the stars
On a clear summers night(or is "A moon lit night" better)
It is you that I will Love
For the rest of my life
SPOKEN: WILL YOU MARRY ME
POEM #4
A Sun rises so bright and beautifully
Then sets so soothingly
The Stars sparkles are ever so beautiful
but nothing compares to my love for you
The sun will rise for all eternity
and end its days always setting in the west
The stars will forever be wished upon
making loved ones smile form ear to ear
Just as my love for you is forever
growing every second of every minute
of every hour of every day
From the first time we met
and for the rest of eternity
It is you that I want to be my forever
I would be honored to be your forever too
SPOKEN: WILL YOU MARRY ME
Are there any glaring ERRORS or parts that dont read or sound right??
Please your opinions are greatly appreciated.
THANKS
I EDITED AND ADDED IN POEM #2