Invitation Help

[p&j]

Hi,

I''m a little new on here. My fiancé and I have just finished creating the wording on our invites. We are doing more of a casual affair, let me know what you think. THANKS!

First and First Last
along with First and First Last
invite you to share and celebrate at the marriage of their children

First Middle
to
First Middle
Day, Month Date, Year

at 5:00 in the afternoon
Location
Address
City, Province

Reception at 5:30 in the afternoon
Dinner and dancing to follow

Reply card enclosed

We have reserved ____ seat(s) in your honour
___ of ___ happily accept
___ regretfully decline
Please list any food allergies you may have _______________________

Please RSVP by
Day, Month Date, Year

 

[tlh]

I like it!

Personal preference, but I like time and dates spelled out, as well as RSVP to state, "a response is requested before xx-xx-xx" or something like that... but as you stated it is casual, it is just a matter of personal style.

This is exciting!

 

[mrscushion]

Date: 5/14/2009 11:39:26 AM
Author:p&j
First and First Last
along with First and First Last
invite you to share and celebrate at the marriage of their children
First Middle
to
First Middle
Day, Month Date, Year

at 5:00 in the afternoon
Location
Address
City, Province
Reception at 5:30 in the afternoon
Dinner and dancing to follow
Reply card enclosed
We have reserved ____ seat(s) in your honour
___ of ___ happily accept
___ regretfully decline
Please list any food allergies you may have _______________________
Please RSVP by
Day, Month Date, Year

Just wondering whether this expression is correct? In terms of grammar, shouldn''t it rather be "share in and celebrate the marriage..."?

Haven or other etiquette / invite wording mavens?

 

[p&j]

I like your wording better, it does sound better.

Thanks to both of you!

 

[sammyj]

I agree with mscushion''s change and I also wanted to add that I''d write 5:00 in the evening rather than afternoon. That''s just a personal preference as I don''t know when afternoon ends and when evening starts.

I''m also assuming that you aren''t writing ''reply card enclosed'' anywhere in the invite? That was just added for us to know that we were reading the reply card wording, right?