Sorry diamond buffs...I''ve posted this here too b/c of the traffic this forum gets.
Here''s my situation...I''ve got my proposal worked out. Basically, I''m going to recreate our first date, adding a little walk to a place where I plan to read a poem and pop the question. I''ve never really written a poem and don''t know a thing about poetry. I would like some candid feedback from anyone, experienced in the art or not, on what I''ve penned. If it''s cheesy, missing commas doesn’t flow well, tell me. If you know of any good web sites on writing poetry that I should visit and start from scratch, tell me. Time is of the essence and I appreciate any feedback. The semi-colons are actually line breaks but I couldn’t get it to fit on the post otherwise. Thanks.
Here''s my situation...I''ve got my proposal worked out. Basically, I''m going to recreate our first date, adding a little walk to a place where I plan to read a poem and pop the question. I''ve never really written a poem and don''t know a thing about poetry. I would like some candid feedback from anyone, experienced in the art or not, on what I''ve penned. If it''s cheesy, missing commas doesn’t flow well, tell me. If you know of any good web sites on writing poetry that I should visit and start from scratch, tell me. Time is of the essence and I appreciate any feedback. The semi-colons are actually line breaks but I couldn’t get it to fit on the post otherwise. Thanks.