Wedding Can I get invitation wording feedback please?

[Shannon72781]

Together with their families

Shannon Elise

And

Brian Joseph

Invite you to join them in the celebration of their marriage

Saturday, the twenty-fifth of April
Two thousand and nine
At five o’clock in the evening
RECEPTION
RECEPTION ADDRESS
CITY, NY

Reception to follow

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Kindly reply by March 25, 2009

M______________________________

___ Accepts
___ Declines
Please indicate the quantity of each guests
Entrée choice:
___ Prime Rib of Beef Au Jus
___ Pan Roasted Salmon with Lemon Caper Sauce
___ Prosciutto and Boursin Cheese Stuffed Chicken

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Accommodations:

Rooms have been reserved for our guests at the
HOTEL at a discounted rate
of $109 per night. Please make reservations prior to
March 25, 2009 to secure a room at the discounted
rate and mention group code "VSW"

Please call NUMBER for reservations

HOTEL
HOTEL ADDRESS

Shuttle Information:

A shuttle will be provided to our hotel guests for transportation
to and from RECEPTION VENUE. Departure times from the hotel
will be specified upon check in and posted at the front desk.

Also, are direction cards really needed? I have people coming for points west, south and north. I figure since I''m having the reception address and hotel address on the invite, people can Nav it in their car or mapquest it. Thoughts??

 

[Sabine]

The wording looks great!

I will point out that although two thousand nine is technically correct (the and represents a decimal point), most people write the and in anyway (I even think I did knowing it was technically wrong)

I will also say that for your response cards, will you need to know WHO is having WHAT and not just how many of each you need? My place cards had to have the meal choice on them, so I had the entrees listed, and then a line for them to write their names under it so I could tell what meal went with what person.

Finally, I don''t think you need directions, since your ceremony and reception are at the same place, but a little map of the area of the reception might be nice to include (you can just print off mapquest or google maps.

 

[bootsiekin]

Hi Shannon,

I used almost the same invitation wording, and my name is also Shannon!

(we used the "request the honour of your presence")

For my reply cards, I ran into the problem that Sabine mentioned. I didnt realize that until they were already printed that I needed to know who was eating what because the venue requested I use some kind of symbol on the place card to indicate the meal choice to the wait staff. What I am going to do though, is the ones I dont know who is having which meal, I will put both of the couples names on one place card and the staff will just have to ask them which is having which meal. A lot of the couples ordered the same meal, so it actually didnt turn into too much of a problem.

For the directions, my reception venue (a hotel) had cards with a little map and directions from points north, south, etc. because I have a lot of people coming from several hours away. I included that with the invitation. Maybe your hotel has something similar? I know most people have GPS or will use mapquest, but some older adults might not be savvy with that stuff.

 

[newbie124]

To bootsie's reply, I think "request the honour of your presence" is technically reserved for when your ceremony is in a church, otherwise "request the pleasure of your company" is used. But most people probably aren't going to know that and I also think the way you have it written sounds good.

Sabine is also right in that the "and" for the year is not necessary. You also don't really need "in the evening" since most people are not going to assume you mean 5 in the morning! But it's personal preference as to whether you like the sound/look or would prefer for it to be cleaner/more succinct.

Also, don't forget to spell out "NY" in the address line.

I might also change the entree choice wording to be "Please initial your entree selections." You may still get people putting in numbers, but hopefully at least a few guests will catch that beforehand and thus help you know who is requesting what.

And finally, I think you're probably fine w/o direction cards. Most people end up mapping the exact directions they'll need online anyway. It can be helpful, but you should also be perfectly fine leaving them out.

 

[Shannon72781]

Thanks all for your helpful replies!

First, yes I know "and" is kinda incorrect, but I think it sounds nicer, lol

Also, my venue fortunately does not require us to have each perso''s name spelleced out with their meal choice. I was afraid of this at first, but I asked my venue contact and she said the waiter will still ask you tableside for your entree choice. They requested this on the invite to get a general idea of how much the cook needs to prepare and then they do an overage in case people forgot their order or changed their mind. I was very happy to hear that!!

I''m relieved to know directions are not required. I may make a map, depnding on how crafty I''m feeling. my main reason for not doing so is Im getting these letetrpressed and wanted all the enclosures to be so as well. An added direction card is added $$$ lol.

Again, thanks for proof reading me!

 

[bootsiekin]

Date: 9/29/2008 3:07:20 PM
Author: newbie124


To bootsie''s reply, I think ''request the honour of your presence'' is technically reserved for when your ceremony is in a church, otherwise ''request the pleasure of your company'' is used. But most people probably aren''t going to know that and I also think the way you have it written sounds good.

Thanks, newbie - my ceremony is in a church which is why I chose that wording.

I''m glad you approve though since my wedding is in 12 days and the invitations were out loooooong ago. lol!

Sorry if that was confusing.

 

[VRBeauty]

Hmm...

Please indicate the quantity of each guests
Entrée choice:



___ Prime Rib of Beef Au Jus
___ Pan Roasted Salmon with Lemon Caper Sauce
___ Prosciutto and Boursin Cheese Stuffed Chicken

The entrees look great... so it's nice that I'd get to choose more than one, if I wanted to.

Perhaps it would be safer to say "please indicate each guest's choice of entree"?

Also, some brides have had problems with guests feeling free to invite uninvited guests. Others have used "____ seats have been reserved in your honor" to prevent that..... but you're in the best position to know whether this would be a problem with the people on your guest list.

Finally,

Departure times from the hotel
will be specified upon check in and posted at the front desk

seems kind of like too much information for an otherwise fairly formal invite -- all your guests really need to know at this point is that the shuttle will be available. Would it be possible to get the specifics to the out-of-town guests in some other way, or to ask the hotel to provide the information to your guests as they check in? .

 

[basil]

I think it should be "Chicken stuffed with proscuitto and boursin cheese" to match the other entrees where the main thing is listed first.