Post by BearMan » March 13th, 2004, 10:02 am


well I wasnt able to make this a poll but your responses are appreciated.....


 


I am going to be putting a "POEM" in a BOTTLE that is sealed with a cork and have it so we find it on our normal sunday walk on the beach(having a friend baby sit it from a distance with camcorder in hand too).....


 


Which one of the following should i put in the bottle??


 


POEM #1


From the Sun to the Moon


                          and (should i just remove "and")


The Sand to the Stars


 


Like the sparkles of the stars


on


                      A clear summers night(or is "A moon lit night" better)


 


It is you that I will Love


For the rest of my life


SPOKEN: WILL YOU MARRY ME


 


POEM #2 




From the Sun to the Moon


and The Sand to the Stars


 


 From Mercury to Venus


and Earth to Mars


 


Like the sparkles of the stars


On a Moon lit night


 


It is you that I will Love


For the rest of my life


SPOKEN: WILL YOU MARRY ME


 


POEM #3




From the Sun to the Moon


The Sea to the Sky


 


Like the sparkles of the stars


                           On a clear summers night(or is "A moon lit night" better)


 


It is you that I will Love


For the rest of my life


SPOKEN: WILL YOU MARRY ME


 


 


POEM #4


A Sun rises so bright and beautifully


Then sets so soothingly


 


The Stars sparkles are ever so beautiful


but nothing compares to my love for you


 


The sun will rise for all eternity


and end its days always setting in the west


 


The stars will forever be wished upon


making loved ones smile form ear to ear


 


Just as my love for you is forever


growing every second of every minute


of every hour of every day


From the first time we met


and for the rest of eternity


 


It is you that I want to be my forever


I would be honored to be your forever too


SPOKEN: WILL YOU MARRY ME


 


 


Are there any glaring ERRORS or parts that dont read or sound right??


 


Please your opinions are greatly appreciated.


 


THANKS


 


I EDITED AND ADDED IN POEM #2